Re: [E-devel] [PATCH] Fix a message in the updates checker.

[Igor M. <int...@gm...>]

On Thu, 3 Jan 2013 17:55:21 +0900
Carsten Haitzler (The Rasterman) <ra...@ra...> wrote:

> On Thu, 22 Nov 2012 02:05:00 +0400 Igor Murzov <e-...@da...> said:
> 
> this is all fixed by now - but i think an extra , in one place could have been
> good - i added it in. :)

"As a bi-product of this" and "as a result" in one sentence also looks like a bug:

  As a bi-product of this, Enlightenment will
  connect to enlightenment.org and transmit
  some information as a result

I'll suggest dropping "as a result" part.


-- Igor

> > ---
> >  src/modules/wizard/page_170.c | 14 +++++++-------
> >  1 file changed, 7 insertions(+), 7 deletions(-)
> > 
> > diff --git a/src/modules/wizard/page_170.c b/src/modules/wizard/page_170.c
> > index 7ae75b1..fe42877 100644
> > --- a/src/modules/wizard/page_170.c
> > +++ b/src/modules/wizard/page_170.c
> > @@ -31,18 +31,18 @@ wizard_page_show(E_Wizard_Page *pg)
> >     e_widget_textblock_markup_set
> >       (ob,
> >       _("Enlightenment can check for new<br>"
> > -       "versions, updates, securiity and<br>"
> > -       "bugfixes, as well as available add-ons.<br>"
> > +       "versions, updates, security and<br>"
> > +       "bug fixes, as well as available add-ons.<br>"
> >         "<br>"
> >         "This is very useful, because it lets you<br>"
> > -       "you know about available bug fixes and<br>"
> > +       "know about available bug fixes and<br>"
> >         "security fixes when they happen. As a<br>"
> >         "bi-product of this, Enlightenment will<br>"
> >         "connect to enlightenment.org and transmit<br>"
> > -       "some information as a result much like any<br>"
> > -       "web browser might do. No personal information<br>"
> > -       "such as username, password or any personal<br>"
> > -       "files will be transmitted. If you do not like<br>"
> > +       "some information much like any web browser<br>"
> > +       "might do. No personal information such as<br>"
> > +       "username, password or any personal files<br>"
> > +       "will be transmitted. If you do not like<br>"
> >         "this, please disable this below. It is highly<br>"
> >         "advised that you do not disable this as it<br>"
> >         "may leave you vulnerable or having to live<br>"
> > --