Re: [Rails-devel] 1856 SR escrow reporting

[Aliza P. <ali...@gm...>]

I would have been happy with something shorter, since the price paid
is in the immediately preceding report line, but this is excellent.

And Mark, thank you for the lesson on writing more useful bug reports ;-)

 - Aliza

On Sat, Jan 16, 2010 at 6:09 AM, Erik Vos <eri...@xs...> wrote:
> I have gone for
>
> The price of $65 is paid to the Bank, which now holds $325 in escrow for LPS
>
> I think this is concise and still clear enough.
> Erik.
>
>
>
> -----Original Message-----
> From: Phil Davies [mailto:de...@gm...]
> Sent: Saturday 16 January 2010 02:12
> To: Development list for Rails: an 18xx game
> Subject: Re: [Rails-devel] 1856 SR escrow reporting
>
> Chris has picked up on the point that I think the rest of us were
> missing (I was!)...the price wasn't 325, the price was 65 and the
> total amount in escrow is now 325, which is misleading.
>
> You could also say
> The price ($65) is paid to the Bank which holds it in escrow for LPS
> ($325 total in escrow for LPS)
>
> Phil
>
> 2010/1/16 Chris Shaffer <chr...@gm...>:
>> But the price was 65, not 325.
>>
>> --
>> Chris Shaffer
>>
>> Please consider the environment before printing this email.
>>
>> On Jan 15, 2010, at 5:05 PM, brett lentz <wak...@gm...> wrote:
>>
>>> I'm in agreement with Erik on this one, and a native speaker of the
>>> language. ;-)
>>>
>>> There's no functional difference between the sentences. I don't see
>>> where they might make someone think the money was paid to anybody
>>> other than the escrow holdings for LPS. Both sentences presume that
>>> the reader knows what "held in escrow" means. So, I don't see why you
>>> describe our version as misleading.
>>>
>>> The only real grammatical errors are the missing comma before the
>>> 'which' clause and the lack of a period at the end of the sentence.
>>> See also: http://www.grammarbook.com/punctuation/parens.asp and
>>>
> http://www.cliffsnotes.com/WileyCDA/CliffsReviewTopic/Uses-of-Parentheses.to
> picArticleId-29011,articleId-28994.html
>>>
>>> If you don't care for the parentheses, these options would also be
>>> another way to state it:
>>>
>>> "The price of $325 is paid to the Bank, which holds it in escrow for
>>> LPS."
>>> "The price, $325, is paid to the Bank, which holds it in escrow for
>>> LPS."
>>>
>>> ---Brett.
>>>
>>>
>>>
>>> On Fri, Jan 15, 2010 at 2:54 PM, Erik Vos <eri...@xs...> wrote:
>>>> I frankly don't see any substantial difference between these two
>>>> formulations.
>>>> Now English isn't my mother language, so I'm open to be corrected...
>>>>
>>>> Erik.
>>>>
>>>> -----Original Message-----
>>>> From: Aliza Panitz [mailto:ali...@gm...]
>>>> Sent: Friday 15 January 2010 22:22
>>>> To: Development list for Rails: an 18xx game
>>>> Subject: [Rails-devel] 1856 SR escrow reporting
>>>>
>>>> A nitpick from the SR report window:
>>>>
>>>> Joshua buys a 10% share of LPS from IPO for $65.
>>>> The price ($325) is paid to the Bank which holds it in escrow for LPS
>>>>
>>>> This is misleading, and can confuse newer players.  How about:
>>>>
>>>> The price is paid to the Bank which now holds $325 in escrow for LPS
>>>>
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