Re: [Rails-devel] 1856 SR escrow reporting

[Chris S. <chr...@gm...>]

But the price was 65, not 325.

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On Jan 15, 2010, at 5:05 PM, brett lentz <wak...@gm...> wrote:

> I'm in agreement with Erik on this one, and a native speaker of the
> language. ;-)
>
> There's no functional difference between the sentences. I don't see
> where they might make someone think the money was paid to anybody
> other than the escrow holdings for LPS. Both sentences presume that
> the reader knows what "held in escrow" means. So, I don't see why you
> describe our version as misleading.
>
> The only real grammatical errors are the missing comma before the
> 'which' clause and the lack of a period at the end of the sentence.
> See also: http://www.grammarbook.com/punctuation/parens.asp and
> http://www.cliffsnotes.com/WileyCDA/CliffsReviewTopic/Uses-of-Parentheses.topicArticleId-29011,articleId-28994.html
>
> If you don't care for the parentheses, these options would also be
> another way to state it:
>
> "The price of $325 is paid to the Bank, which holds it in escrow for  
> LPS."
> "The price, $325, is paid to the Bank, which holds it in escrow for  
> LPS."
>
> ---Brett.
>
>
>
> On Fri, Jan 15, 2010 at 2:54 PM, Erik Vos <eri...@xs...> wrote:
>> I frankly don't see any substantial difference between these two
>> formulations.
>> Now English isn't my mother language, so I'm open to be corrected...
>>
>> Erik.
>>
>> -----Original Message-----
>> From: Aliza Panitz [mailto:ali...@gm...]
>> Sent: Friday 15 January 2010 22:22
>> To: Development list for Rails: an 18xx game
>> Subject: [Rails-devel] 1856 SR escrow reporting
>>
>> A nitpick from the SR report window:
>>
>> Joshua buys a 10% share of LPS from IPO for $65.
>> The price ($325) is paid to the Bank which holds it in escrow for LPS
>>
>> This is misleading, and can confuse newer players.  How about:
>>
>> The price is paid to the Bank which now holds $325 in escrow for LPS
>>
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